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Hero Section Copywriting Framework that Converts 3x

Your landing page has less than 3 seconds to hook visitors.

If they only read this text on your page, will they know exactly what you offer? Or even better, will it tempt them to learn more about your brand?

A weak message will make people instantly bounce.

Here's my go-to framework:

Headline

Explain the specific value people get that only your brand can offer. This is your promise to prospects, your big idea, and the reason your brand exists.

No vague claims like "get more done!" or "increase collaboration!"

The trick is to not talk about what you do, but instead what transformation you're helping with. Tap into either their deepest desires or their most superficial, nothing in between.

Example: a tax software for startups

Old headline: Have your taxes automated ---> New headline: Get $20k back from the IRS in 20 minutes

The old headline explains what they do, which is a helpful service. Saving time on manually doing taxes is great, but what people really want to hear is them either saving or making more money.

Subheadline

This is where you can give more detail about your offer. To show people how you give value while handling any objections they may have.

What you do + who you're helping + how you're helping.

Following our tax software example: We help SaaS startups claim tax credits that most accountants miss.

You can also add a guarantee to help with any uncertainties they have. "Pay $0 if we don't save you any money."

Main CTA

drives excitement, fomo, and reduces friction. More of a call-to-value than call-to-action. Don’t add any pressure, let them take action on their terms.

  • learn more —> create your ___ now
  • sign up —> start your free trial, no CC required
  • get started —> start building
  • buy now —> get x% off today!

Bonus tips:

  • Write how your audience talks. You can take examples from positive reviews of your brand and negative reviews from your competitors
  • Eliminate uncertainty by addressing their objections and showing social proof.
  • Take stand with your audience. relate to them, empathize, and be by their side.
  • Don't sell products, sell painkillers, lifestyle upgrades, transformations, investments.
  • If possible, have different landing pages depending on the source of traffic and how aware they are of your product. The landing page of someone unaware + coming from tik tok has a different message than the landing page people see after actively searching on google.

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Notion Template

Founders Stash- A notion template for writing your ideas and execution with the framework of the "Grow Method".

Hope it was helpful!

  1. 2

    Thanks for sharing!
    very helpful and informative resources.

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      AM GLAD I COULD HELP:)

  2. 2

    Agreed. Frame the problem, sell the future/benefit of ur product.

    1. 1

      right right and right!

  3. 4

    Good framework. You can also generate your hero pitch using storypitch.ai

  4. 2

    Thanks a ton for this insightful breakdown! Your tips on crafting a message that taps into the transformative power of the product are pure gold. The framework you provided, with the compelling headline, subheadline, and strategic CTA, is what I need as a beginner. really appreciate that

    1. 1

      Am really glad i could bring some value for you with this post @lyl003

  5. 2

    It resonates well with results I've got from launching every new startup in which I tried to improve on marketing copy and doing a better job at creating landing pages that converts and make people interested.

    I'm tech dev, so first projects I was describing from a technical point of view. Got some feedback and improved.

    Now e.g. StartupUtils LP has much better wording, and resulted in a few sales compared to prev projects reaching 0 customers.

    I'd summarize it as sell dreams, people needs :) Show how your product can improve their life!

  6. 2

    Love the post structure and the helpful resources!

  7. 2

    Crafting a hero section copywriting framework that converts 3x is crucial for capturing user attention and driving engagement. Now, imagine implementing this framework for Disrupt Technology's crypto debit card white label loading platform. By highlighting the platform's key features, such as instant loading, secure transactions, and seamless integration with popular cryptocurrencies, you can create compelling copy that resonates with potential users. As they land on the website and are greeted by this impactful messaging, they'll be compelled to learn more and, ultimately, make the decision to purchase the card. It's not just about crafting words; it's about crafting a narrative that drives action and leads to real results.

  8. 2

    The resources section is so unbelievably helpful!
    I struggle with making headlines sound genuine and not clickbaity.

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      Before writing the headline, I try to answer The Who and The What:

      Who are we talking to in our communications?
      What are the things that make our audience tick, what moves them, what motivates them, what are their pain and pleasure points in life?

      What exactly are we trying to say?

      What about our service or product or idea could connect with the way our audience lives? What problems are we solving? What do they think of us now? What would we like them to think of us after we reach them? How do we make our audience happy/intrigued/entertained/informed/aware?

      Detailed answers to the who and the what always leads to the big insight. From there, you'd be surprised how a lot of great ideas just kind of write themselves.

  9. 2

    You wrote very comprehensively, thank you for the framework!

    1. 1

      Am glad it was helpful:)

  10. 2

    Thank you for the content and sharing the resources!

  11. 2

    I will take this to heart. Writing good copy is hard for engineers!

    1. 1

      Thank you! I know that very well that's why I keep posting marketing content here...

  12. 2

    Thank you! This kind of content is the reason why I'm still subscribed to Indie Hackers newsletter.

    1. 1

      Am glad it was helpful:)

  13. 2

    Thanks for this. It brilliantly emphasizes the critical importance of clarity and persuasion in those crucial first few seconds of visitor engagement.

  14. 2

    Very good writeup. Quite useful to have a deep dive into a single section of the landing page rather than superficial points about landing pages overall. Especially since this is the hero, the most important section.

    1. 1

      Thank you so much. I can't take this whole post as my own idea, it's a mix of ideas/tips from different places and I just sum it up. Also, I think Nowadays, the hero section is often complex and confusing, filled with complex words that even customers do not understand.

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